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inevitable closure.














fall from the sky into
you; a pure electron stream
me; stage 3 rockets firing to break the pull/ mother~earth
the ions below are not aware of us,
nor are the stars, our distant kin, invisible

while this alone reinforces us; halfway between the
infinite and recessive as
time
stands
still

caught in the wake of our black hole kiss,
an accretion disk concerned only with the inevitable closure
an event horizon on the verge of



it's cosmic, this surface tension, like wet skin in the rain
if ever I had forgotten the sorrow, it was now, it was here as
we kissed in the starlight%
















2002 jesse michael renaud
just imagine
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Daily Deviation

Given 2002-01-30
Saturn V by frail escorts the reader on a cosmic voyage take takes on sensual tones and seduces as it progresses. Mesmerizing! Selected by `faithwalker. ( Featured by devart )
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ShadyBlues Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2010  Student Photographer
this gets a dd and only 6 favorites what is this nonsense
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minuitserenite Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2004
you really do know wht its like to [want to] love, dont you? *sigh*

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nous-sommes-vous Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2004
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so damn cool; i love your poetry! i want to print it out and inscribe it on my skin!
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orphan Featured By Owner May 4, 2004
awh. :-)
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daeira Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2004
This is goddamn incredible. I especially liked the first stanza, and your line-breaks in it. You write about love in such a refreshing and wonderfully new way it blows my mind. And the references to cosmos, atoms.. again: I adore it. Amazing.

Just wondering though, what does the numbers in the titles mean?
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pixel-dirt Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2004
it would be nice to forget our sorrows... beautiful poem...

ben
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melocopter Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2002  Professional Traditional Artist
no maybe about it this one is my fav!
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summerheart Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2002
So beautiful. This one may be my favorite.
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fuctuptink Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2002
i love this..... your style is so awesome and you convey your thought and emotions so well...
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spread your wings and prepare to fly...
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girlfromverona Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2002
I don't usually go for "love" poetry, but this is truly wonderful. I love your style. :) (Smile)

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aaranasvoice Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2002
Cool. I like the cosmic romance you have spelt out for your reader. I like a lot about this poem, in fact. I even like the manner in which the couple gets to occupy all space and yet seem fairly well grounded. I wonder what a black hole kiss would be like?

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cubal Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2002
wow... that is awesome :) (Smile)

I love the second stanza: - the way you've put the "time stands still" just gives such a strong sense of cosmic scale, and infinity.... it's amazing.

Tears of joy

Out of cheese error... please re-install universe and try again.
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klf Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2002
congrats on the DP! I am happy I was the first one to comment ;) (Wink)
lovely words!


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manadrake Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2002
Congrats on the DP. You deserve it. Peace and well wishes to you and yours.

*Notices Jsenn's post* Wow! She said "to sleep perchance to dream"...thats a phrase that haunts me since the day I first heard it.

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jsenn Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2002
Simply spectacular! I felt great sadness, and yet, no it's just me. Then your words took me away for an instant, took me totally away from this, from reality, from earth beneath my feet, broke the pull and allowed me to soar above and apart. "the inevitable closure..." How I yearn for this promise. I am going to bed now. This is the last poem I will read tonight. This one I want to sleep in...perchance to dream. Congratulations... :) (Smile)

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pwca Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2002
Congrats Frail! This is very deserving :D (Big Grin)


./pwca
who clipped my wings?
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dreamz13 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2002
Very entertaining. Space and tender loving all rolled into one. Congrats!


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anon-y-mouse Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2002
congratulations on the daily poem *hugs*

i still thinks its a beautiful poem :) (Smile)

~me
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zlim Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2002
Congrats on the DP man.

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madcoffee Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2002  Professional Digital Artist
ohman!! wish I can vote again. :D (Big Grin) I'm so glad to see that you got DP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

jesse!!! I'm so proud of you.

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inulg Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2002  Professional Digital Artist
*tears at the eye* AWW!! THIS IS SO SWEET!! It reminds me of when me and my guy are together..... >SIIIIIIIIIIGH
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cyril Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2002
I like your use of words, talking about Ions and streams of electrons..
beautiful
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anon-y-mouse Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2002
beautifully executed, everyone needs to experience such a kiss at least once

~me
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soma Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2002  Professional General Artist
aiyee! this one almost slipped past me :( (Sad) ...
damn buggy deviant watch- i wondered why it said 13 but only 8 deviations were on the list :| (Mad) *grumble*
o, but worth the search, and the wait.... *sigh*
shivers and melts....

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pwca Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2002
stellar!!
Like sometimes your hearts pounding so hard you fear if you look down your feet won't be on terra firma!! Damn!! I want one! ;) (Wink)

./pwca

...and i just threw him up against the wall and...
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gottmacher Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2002
Beautiful piece... staggering in the begining, choaking at the end. Wonderfully done. Reminds me of a lot of my favorite EBM artist's work.

-[Transmission terminated]-
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lspace101 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2002
souls cry for such a kiss....

~lspace101
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princessztar Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2002
beautifully done, trying to capture the universe into that kiss under the stars. :) (Smile)

*~Its nice when strangers become friends, but not when friends become strangers~*
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madcoffee Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2002  Professional Digital Artist
*hugs*

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manadrake Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2002
Yes...wet skin is beautiful. Some forces we are unable to mitigate are we not? Even in the endings we are made whole.

As always beautiful...introspective yet "seeking". How you meld such things I will never know. Wonderful work, my friend.

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orbital Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2002  Professional Interface Designer
i love your work.
Crying -sigh-


-orb
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passenger Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2002  Student
mmm. Can see it all. Very beautiful. And the word beautiful has been down played by society but I use it to its true potential here.

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eringonz Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2002   Photographer
e.e. cummings might *sound* cliche, but your style is reminiscent... few words, but vivid imagery...

i actually think of the song "summer romance" by incubus.... this poem gives the same feeling to me....

there's something very sensual about being in "the moment" with someone...feeling everything simultaneously...

*dreamy sigh*
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klf Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2002
its beautiful, and makes me a little sad. lovely poetry.

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